LIFE IS MONEY
Stop in your tracks and
have a look at your neighbours. Have you noticed that the baker starts working
even when it is still dark? The same happens with the chemist, who leaves her
children with the baby-sitter all the day
long and returns home just before dinner. And you are probably on your way to work, as usual. The same
routine, the same sacrifice every single day - whether
you like it or not. But you see; you are not
the only early bird. At least one person in each family is extrinsically
motivated to work, simply because we know that nothing in this world can be
done without money. As it is often said, “money makes the world go round.”
First of all, money is a
necessary element to satisfy our basic needs as human beings. We
cannot meet them without money. I have yet to see someone who can get food from
a supermarket for free; or someone who does
not need to own or rent a house. Homeless people are unfortunates that cannot
satisfy their basic needs. They are out of work and, consequently, without enough money to live in the way every human being deserves.
Then, money is dignity.
Secondly, money provides
us with a better living standard. In such a globalised
world, motorized by capitalism and consumerism, we feel that our materialistic priorities go beyond what
is really vital for us to live. As a result, we get the impression that
we need more and more money as life goes on. We
constantly feel we are in lack of something; we are never satisfied with what
we’ve got. We are eager to earn money to spend it on things that,
although not essential, make our lives easier and more comfortable. For
instance, probably any housewife today would certainly
refuse to do the washing without an automatic washing machine,
or any boy had better watch the football
match on a huge LCD than on the old television. Then, money is comfort.
Last but not
least, money is, throughout the
world, a synonym of authority and dominance. Therefore, it may also be
the root of all evil. The well-known politician Cicero (106-43 BC) once said
“endless money forms the sinews of war.” This saying does not sound ancient at
all. Today we are still witnessing the conflicts between powerful and weaker
countries, and what’s more, the threat of a possible WWIII. The battles are won by he who has the deadliest gun. Therefore,
without money there is no war
machinery to help them control the enemy. Lady Liberty labeled itself as a God
who fights for the Greater Good… of whom? Of the magnates who are in the money to gain influence over
their ‘friends’. Then, money is power.
All in all,
the world in which we live obliges us to go out and get
what seems to be its fuel: money. The money we so much need to live with
dignity and comfort. The money that guarantees some countries they will prevail
over others. The same money that almost
always, unfortunately, causes so many troubles. For my money, I’d rather say “money makes the
world go down.”
Garnero, Romina; Hess, Melani
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LIFE IS MONEY
Stop in your tracks and
have a look at your neighbours. Have you noticed that the baker starts working
even when it is still dark? The same happens with the chemist, who leaves her
children with the baby-sitter all the day
long and returns home just before dinner. And you are probably on your way to work, as usual. The same
routine, the same sacrifice every single day. (I would
write , or ;) Whether you like it or not. But you see; you are not the only early bird. At least one
person in each family is extrinsically motivated to work, simply because we
know that nothing in this world can be done without money. As it is often said,
“money makes the world go round.”
First of all, money is a
necessary condition (money is necessary or necessary
element...money is not a condition) to satisfy our basic needs as human
beings. We cannot (make a living..it’s only an idea..)
meet them without money. I have yet to see someone who can get food from a
supermarket for free; or someone who do (does)
not need (money?) to own or rent a house. Homeless
people are unfortunates that cannot satisfy their basic needs. They are out of
work and, consequently, without money enough (enough
money) to live (adequately or any other
adjective?..without the rest..) in the way that
every human being deserves. Then, money is dignity.
Secondly, money provides
us with a better living standard. In such a globalised
world, motorized by capitalism and consumerism, we feel that our priorities go
beyond our basic needs (what is really vital to
live...or a synonym of "basic needs") Consequently (as a result..repeated before), we get the impression
that we need more and more money (in order to fulfill
our desires... I don't think "time
goes by" has much to do) as time goes by. We
constantly feel we are in lack of something; we are never satisfied with what
we’ve got. We are eager to earn money to spend it on things that,
although not essential, make our lives easier and more comfortable ( or luxurious). For instance, (probably/almost)any housewife today would certainly
refuse to do the washing without an automatic washing machine. (perhaps a comma would suitbetter here)Or any boy had
better watch the football match on a huge LCD
than on the old television. Then, money is comfort.
Last, (it's altogether, without
the comma 'last but not least')but not least, money is, throughout the world, a synonym of authority
and dominance. Therefore, it is also the root of
all evil (in
that sense..or is it always the root of ALL evil?). The well-known politician Cicero
(106-43 BC) once said “endless money forms the sinews of war.” This saying does
not sound ancient at all. Today we are still witnessing the conflicts between
powerful and weaker countries, and what’s more, the threat of a possible WWIII.
The battles are won by
he? (the one) who has the deadliest gun (so/therefore)without money; there is no war machinery to help them control the enemy.
Lady Liberty labeled itself as a God who fights for the Greater Good… of whom? Of
the magnates who are in the money (bussiness?)to gain influence over their ‘friends’. Then, money is power.
All in all,
the world in which we live oblige (obliges) us to go out and get what seems to be its fuel:
money. The money we so much need to live with dignity and comfort. The money
that guarantees some countries they will prevail over others. The same money that almost always,
unfortunately, causes so many troubles. For my money, I’d rather say “money makes the
world go down.” ( I didn't quite get the last
sentence...)
Peer correction (Borello, Carolina; Bernasconi, Franca)
Linguistic
Accuracy 3
Range and
appropriateness 4
Content and
organization 4
Self evaluation (Garnero, Romina; Hess, Melani)
Linguistic Accuracy 3
Range and appropriateness 4
Content and organization 4
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