That clinking clanking sound Carolina and Franca

That clinking clanking sound

That ours is an age of money is not under discussion. But when talking about cash, not everyone allocates the same role to it.  With relation to it, there is a well known saying from a famous musical in which Liza Minelly sang: “money makes the world go round”. We all like to have money, but is it really the earth’s fuel?

On the one hand, we must admit that all human activity is, at root, directed by capital. First of all,  money is necessary to satisfy our primary needs such as nutrition and health care. We have to pay in order to receive certain services, and, in fact, the more money we pay the better services we receive, such as medical services. What is more, money motivates much of human activity such as geological exploration, scientific research, technological advances, and politics.  In other words, we would not be living in such a globalized world if it  weren’t for the constant flow of capital throughout the world.

On the other hand, there are things of vital importance in life, whose existence is not always guaranteed by money and frivolous modern comforts. Money can never buy family, true friends, and peace of mind which, we believe, are the keys to happiness. As regards health, although there are diseases that can be cured by expensive treatments, generally money does not ensure a long and healthy life. Furthermore, all too often money takes over people’s lives, and they get engaged in a vicious circle. This means that they never feel fully satisfied with what they have and are constantly seeking to obtain even more money by any means, fair or foul.

Concluding, we believe it is true that money is a substantial element to live in this capitalist world but it is not enough to make one achieve self-realization, reach our goals and consequently, live a happy life. All in all, one’s priority should be to have a firm and clear set of morals and values in order to enjoy the simple pleasures of life because, as The Beatles sang: “I don't care too much for money, for money can't buy me love."


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Content and Organisation                 1 2 3     4    5
Range and Appropriateness             1 2 3     4    5

That clinking clanking sound

That ours is an age of money is not under discussion (I prefer ‘out of the question’). But when talking about cash, not everyone allocates the same role to it.  With relation to it, there is a well known saying from a famous musical in which Liza Minelly sang: “money makes the world go round”. We all like to have money, but is it really the earth’s fuel? (I believe it IS the earth’s fuel) (I would say sth like “it is the earth’s fuel but it is not the only thing that matters, it can’t give you anything”)

On the one hand, we must admit that all human activity is, at root, directed by economics (it is not the only science that deals with money) (I would say just money). First of all, money is necessary to satisfy our primary needs such as nutrition and health care. We have to pay in order to receive certain services, and, in fact, the more money we offer/invest? the better services we receive. (which services? I would add an example: medical care, etc.) What is more, money motivates much of human activity such as geological exploration, scientific research, technological advances, and politics.  In other words, we would not be living in such a globalized world if it weren’t for the constant flow of capital throughout the world. (so many is earth’s fuel)

On the other hand, there are things of vital importance in life, whose existence is not always guaranteed by money and frivolous modern comforts. Money can never buy family, true friends, and peace of mind which, we (who? you should sign at the end of the article with both names to clarify that you are two people) (I think that just we is ok, it is not necessary to know exactly who) believe, are the key to happiness. As regards health, although there are diseases that can be cured by expensive treatments, generally money does not ensure a long and healthy life. Furthermore, all too often money takes over people’s lives, and they get engaged in a vicious circle. This means that they never feel fully satisfied with what they have and are constantly seeking to obtain even more money by any means, fair or foul.

Concluding, we believe it is true that money is a substantial element to live in this capitalist world but it is not enough to make one achieve self-realization, reach our goals (doesn’t it imply the same?) and consequently, live a happy life. All in all, one’s priority should be to have a firm and clear set of morals and values in order to enjoy the simple pleasures of life because, as The Beatles sang: “I don't care too much for money, for money can't buy me love."


Peer Evaluation
Linguistic Accuracy                            1 2 3     4    5
Content and Organisation                   1 2 3     4    5
Range and Appropriateness                1 2 3     4    5

Linguistic Accuracy                            1 2 3     4    5
Content and Organisation                 1 2 3     4    5
Range and Appropriateness             1 2 3     4    5

LIFE IS MONEY - Article (Garnero, Hess)

LIFE IS MONEY

Stop in your tracks and have a look at your neighbours. Have you noticed that the baker starts working even when it is still dark? The same happens with the chemist, who leaves her children with the baby-sitter all the day long and returns home just before dinner. And you are probably on your way to work, as usual. The same routine, the same sacrifice every single day - whether you like it or not. But you see; you are not the only early bird. At least one person in each family is extrinsically motivated to work, simply because we know that nothing in this world can be done without money. As it is often said, “money makes the world go round.”

First of all, money is a necessary element to satisfy our basic needs as human beings. We cannot meet them without money. I have yet to see someone who can get food from a supermarket for free; or someone who does not need to own or rent a house. Homeless people are unfortunates that cannot satisfy their basic needs. They are out of work and, consequently, without enough money to live in the way every human being deserves. Then, money is dignity.

Secondly, money provides us with a better living standard. In such a globalised world, motorized by capitalism and consumerism, we feel that our materialistic priorities go beyond what is really vital for us to live. As a result, we get the impression that we need more and more money as life goes on. We constantly feel we are in lack of something; we are never satisfied with what we’ve got. We are eager to earn money to spend it on things that, although not essential, make our lives easier and more comfortable. For instance, probably any housewife today would certainly refuse to do the washing without an automatic washing machine, or any boy had better watch the football match on a huge LCD than on the old television. Then, money is comfort.

Last but not least, money is, throughout the world, a synonym of authority and dominance. Therefore, it may also be the root of all evil. The well-known politician Cicero (106-43 BC) once said “endless money forms the sinews of war.” This saying does not sound ancient at all. Today we are still witnessing the conflicts between powerful and weaker countries, and what’s more, the threat of a possible WWIII. The battles are won by he who has the deadliest gun. Therefore, without money there is no war machinery to help them control the enemy. Lady Liberty labeled itself as a God who fights for the Greater Good… of whom? Of the magnates who are in the money to gain influence over their ‘friends’. Then, money is power.

All in all, the world in which we live obliges us to go out and get what seems to be its fuel: money. The money we so much need to live with dignity and comfort. The money that guarantees some countries they will prevail over others. The same money that almost always, unfortunately, causes so many troubles. For my money, I’d rather say “money makes the world go down.” 

                                                                Garnero, Romina; Hess, Melani

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LIFE IS MONEY

Stop in your tracks and have a look at your neighbours. Have you noticed that the baker starts working even when it is still dark? The same happens with the chemist, who leaves her children with the baby-sitter all the day long and returns home just before dinner. And you are probably on your way to work, as usual. The same routine, the same sacrifice every single day. (I would write , or ;) Whether you like it or not. But you see; you are not the only early bird. At least one person in each family is extrinsically motivated to work, simply because we know that nothing in this world can be done without money. As it is often said, “money makes the world go round.”

First of all, money is a necessary condition (money is necessary or necessary element...money is not a condition) to satisfy our basic needs as human beings. We cannot (make a living..it’s only an idea..) meet them without money. I have yet to see someone who can get food from a supermarket for free; or someone who do (does) not need (money?) to own or rent a house. Homeless people are unfortunates that cannot satisfy their basic needs. They are out of work and, consequently, without money enough (enough money) to live (adequately or any other adjective?..without the rest..) in the way that every human being deserves. Then, money is dignity.

Secondly, money provides us with a better living standard. In such a globalised world, motorized by capitalism and consumerism, we feel that our priorities go beyond our basic needs (what is really vital to live...or a synonym of "basic needs") Consequently (as a result..repeated before), we get the impression that we need more and more money (in order to fulfill our desires... I don't  think "time goes by" has much to do) as time goes by. We constantly feel we are in lack of something; we are never satisfied with what we’ve got. We are eager to earn money to spend it on things that, although not essential, make our lives easier and more comfortable ( or luxurious). For instance, (probably/almost)any housewife today would certainly refuse to do the washing without an automatic washing machine. (perhaps a comma would suitbetter here)Or any boy had better watch the football match on a huge LCD than on the old television. Then, money is comfort.

Last, (it's altogether, without the comma 'last but not least')but not least, money is, throughout the world, a synonym of authority and dominance. Therefore, it is also the root of all evil (in that sense..or is it always the root of ALL evil?). The well-known politician Cicero (106-43 BC) once said “endless money forms the sinews of war.” This saying does not sound ancient at all. Today we are still witnessing the conflicts between powerful and weaker countries, and what’s more, the threat of a possible WWIII. The battles are won by he? (the one) who has the deadliest gun (so/therefore)without money; there is no war machinery to help them control the enemy. Lady Liberty labeled itself as a God who fights for the Greater Good… of whom? Of the magnates who are in the money (bussiness?)to gain influence over their ‘friends’. Then, money is power.

All in all, the world in which we live oblige (obliges) us to go out and get what seems to be its fuel: money. The money we so much need to live with dignity and comfort. The money that guarantees some countries they will prevail over others. The same money that almost always, unfortunately, causes so many troubles. For my money, I’d rather say “money makes the world go down.” ( I didn't quite get the last sentence...)

Peer correction (Borello, Carolina; Bernasconi, Franca)

Linguistic Accuracy 3

Range and appropriateness 4

Content and organization 4

Self evaluation (Garnero, Romina; Hess, Melani)

Linguistic Accuracy 3

Range and appropriateness 4

Content and organization 4

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